 BlackMage
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Date: January 7, 2005 @ 6:32 AM
You've got a good idea there. It definitely needs vocals since I had troubles yet again not pushing the stop button before the end.
Then there's the distortion sound. Little too much of something and it creates huge amounts of that annoying, hissing white noise. My advice that change it to something darker and something that doesn't melt all the rhythm guitars and leads to a one big shit that doesn't sound anything.
I didn't hear the solo that well. Just some hammer ons but after that I kinda lost it since the rhythm guitars just went way over and it turned into mindless cacophony.
The drums need lotsa improvement. The really didn't do any justice to the whole song as they were made of one loop with little variation.
It's a good idea, but you just have to work on it how you're going to make it. Or that's what I think anyway... cheers anyway for a good composition and lets hope you'll get some vox on the next version (I assume that this wasn't the final one). 
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gravy426
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Date: January 7, 2005 @ 7:17 PM
nice jammin song would sound awsome with vocals,good guitar work
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Slashpepper
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Date: January 8, 2005 @ 4:26 PM
Cool, thanks  Yeah, tell me about the guitar sound... close to throwing my effects pedal out the window, seems to like overdoing any form of fuzz *sigh* Yup, definite work in progress!
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 SilverShining
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Date: January 8, 2005 @ 9:27 PM
Ok, here's my couple of pennies. First, the bass sound rocks. It's throaty, discernible and doesn't take over the whole mix. (One of my alter egoes does doom metal and I can't get the bass from doing that. Grr.) The melody lines are top-notch. They're catchy, heavy, and not filler. The unchanging rhythm does hurt the song, though and the ending really left me hanging!  But on the whole, a solid effort!
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 Traf
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Date: January 9, 2005 @ 6:25 AM
Well I think this is good stuff..
I really like your timing with your chords.. spot on the nail...
Nice little bit at 4.16..
I agree with the others that it seems to go on a little long, but to me all it needs is a vocal verse or two.. and maybe a solo in the middle instead of the end..
There's some nice sounds in here. I like the harmony bits and I really like the way you've played the solo at the end..
A lot of work has gone into this and it drives along at steady pace,,
The only bit I'm not sure about is the drop down part where the guitar goes clean.. not sure that that is needed. I think once you have a vocal line, it would be a great rockin song..
Yeah.. great stuff.. 
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 olethros
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Date: January 10, 2005 @ 8:47 AM
Nice guitar playing, maybe the tone of the guitars needs to be altered a bit. Reminds me of early metallica tunes (hope that's not an offence). Nice counterpoint at places. It starts to boring at around 02:00, but a change at 2:30 comes to the rescue. Nice reversion just before the 3rd minute mark, quite seemelessly done. A threat of repetitiveness is countered just before the 4th minute with the double solos, which are however a bit too noisy to be heard properly. At this point a change of chords could have been advantageous, particularly to improve the transition to the soft part. The soft part needs to have a different drum pattern for sure.. nice change from that back to the hard bit.
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geozero
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Date: January 10, 2005 @ 10:23 PM
Definitely guitar tone needs changing. How did you record the guitar? How did you record it (digital, tape, what software, etc.) This may help explain or resolve some of the "sound" issues. Or at least the overall tonal atmosphere.
The tempo should be faster IMO. Some of the guitar work would sound better if layered. Much potential here.
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Slashpepper
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Date: January 11, 2005 @ 7:53 AM
I think it's my guitar's effects pedal doing the ruining, even through my amp it's got some odd sound issues, mainly making things murky, but it's easier to record from than my amp (from the output to the line in on my Soundblaster live, recorded through Cakewalk homestudio 9)
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